Hey I just need someone to read over this and tell me whats wrong ( spelling, grammer, ect ) because for the first time I want a good paper. Also if something doesn%26#039;t make sense please tell me. Thanks in advance for the help!
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Although many people face horrible problems in their everyday lives, compared to those of the blacks in South Africa, their problems pale in comparison. Unlike the whites, the blacks of South Africa have been treated unfairly most of their lives. They had no political rights, were constantly abused and humiliated, and were forced to live in ghetto towns where the whites had all the power. They called this the Apartheid, which basically means the separation of races, and if Nelson Mandela with the help of the World鈥檚 Nations didn鈥檛 step in to stop this then it would probably still exist today. Clearly over the years, most of the black population of South Africa faced many life changing situations including the Apartheid and the ending of the Apartheid|||grammar and everything looked good...try to come up with another word for ghetto...not very good word for this type of paper...also last sentence try South Africa faced many life changing events including the Apartheid and its end.
GOOD LUCK!!|||In the first sentence, change %26quot;their problems pale in comparison%26quot; to %26quot;their problems are pale in comparison.%26quot; That might not be right... but I%26#039;m pretty sure it%26#039;ll make sense either way. The second way just sounds better to me.
%26quot;... the blacks of South Africa have been treated unfairly FOR most of their lives.%26quot; I think it sounds better with a for there, as opposed to without it.
I%26#039;d change ghetto to something else, but if you can%26#039;t find anything else, ghetto would work too.
You need some commas in the sentence that starts with %26quot;They called this the Apartheid...%26quot; They go here: %26quot;... and if Nelson Mandela, with the help of the World%26#039;s Nations, didn%26#039;t step in to stop this then it would probably still exist today.%26quot;
Hope I helped! =)|||I think the first sentence should be:
Many people face horrible problems in their everyday lives, but compared to those of the blacks in South Africa, their problems are pale in comparison.
