Reminiscing past
situations faded
still exists
takes solitude
left strings attached
begone
nothing changes
nothing will
though still
a part likes
a part fears
be awaken it only will
must now be it
if not regret it is
that you will feel
as you as it
you believe
mind perceive
us not by people our ties cares
we are one
but alone
if suffocating
something must be done
only by you only by us
Is this poem that i created correct any wrong thingys that u can say?
I don't really understand it, if I'm honest, but that's only because of the lack of punctuation. Even though poetry isn't prose, it still needs punctuation in order to make it clear :)
I like the imagery in this, but a lot of it doesn't make sense, for example 'situations faded, still exists'. You use the plural situationS and the singular existS. There are a few little grammatical errors, but overall I think it's a good little poem. All it needs is for you to read over it and perfect it, then you've got a winner on your hands.
Is this poem that i created correct any wrong thingys that u can say?
Interesting. But it would look better if you added some punctuation and capital letters!
A couple changes would make a big difference to the reader.
Reminiscing%26quot;the%26quot; past
%26quot;stillness%26quot; exists
%26quot;Strings left attached%26quot;
from %26quot;be awaken, it only will.... you start to loose the reader with your poor selection of words and your inability to create your thoughts on paper.. it is hard for the reader to find direction.and fill the holes. your thoughts seems to be all over the place.. I would reign them in a bit and rethink the last part of the poem.....
and make some changes to it.
